I think Americans should not use guns. They
use guns in a really bad way. A month ago, there was crime scenery in America
because of guns. This was a big issue all over the world. This was a big news
issue in Korea as well. A lot of people over the world said negative things
about this. A guy went to elementary school and killed the teacher, who died
for her students. It was very sad. These crime scenes were caused by guns. Guns
are used to scare and kill people in crimes and wars. Guns are never used in a
good way. In 21st century there were many wars. To prevent these
wars, even a punk rock band ‘’Green Day’’ make a song, ‘’21 guns’’ I will give
you two reasons that why we should ban guns from America.
Guns make America scary. Because of guns,
we can’t live safely. Whenever there is a bad news about guns, a lot of people
will probably think ‘’Government should ban the gun. Government should do it.
It is not my fault.’’ Everyone thinks like that but they never act. Therefore
people never ban the guns. So some criminals keep their guns and use it for bad
things. Police officers also have those little guns, but sometimes, bandits
have even better guns than police and police gets hard to catch them. This
makes America scary.
Next Guns make more crimes possible.
Criminals might have guns and they can just go into a store and steal things with
guns. As I mentioned before, police doesn’t have better weapons. So police might
not be able to handle it. Criminals know this and they make crime much more
possible. The news also said that there are much more crimes in New York than
Korea. Even people in America have more possibility to die by accident. If one crime
scene happens in Korea, no one probably will be dead. However if it happens in America,
there is a higher possibility of people dying when there is a crime.
People who disagree with me might say ‘’
Well if government tries to take away everyone’s guns, will criminals hand
them?’’ I think that if they ban selling bullets, no one will shoot guns in few
years. OR they might say ‘’When should we start it? Since there is so many guns
out there, it will be hard to make sure that we take all of them.’’ We should
try our best, if we gets half of guns out there we would probably decrease half
of crimes caused by guns.
Today I talked about why Americans shouldn’t
use guns because guns make Americans scary and make crimes more possible.
Donghoon,
ReplyDeleteThis is a very good essay. However, you should add some statistics to it to support your reasons. In the conclusion, you also need to summarize the main ideas of the previous paragraphs. Your conclusion is too short. Other than that, it was well-written.
Okay ^^ I'll get some more statistics next time~ Thanks^^
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